Story Title: (5/5)
The title really caught my attention so I’ll give you 5
Description/Summary/Foreword: (4/5)
The description was okay but the letters were too BIG. I think you should minimize it a little. But I like the way you describe the characters.
Story Plot/Originality: (10/10)
I may have read a lot of stories with a cold person but this one is different. So I’ll give you a PERFECT 10!
Flow: (10/10)
The flow of the story was GOOD
Grammar/Spelling: (8/10)
There was one misspelled word and it was from the description. The word was “noscence” I think you should change it to “nonsense”. There were wrong grammars too. The 1st one and 2nd one were from the description and the 3rd one was from the chapter 15
1.Instead of: Theres nothing that your dad can’t do.
Consider: There’s nothing that your dad can’t do.
2.Instead of: You didn’t had friends anyway
Consider: You didn’t have friends anyway.
3.Instead of: No! Of course I didn’t did that on purpose.
Consider: No! Of course I didn’t do that on purpose.
Enjoyment: (9/10)
I do enjoy your story, but I think you have to make your chapters long. Because some people like chapters that are long, I know because I’m an author too. So I’ll give you 9! ^_^
Total: (46/50)
Would I recommend it?: Of course, Yes!!!
Sorry if it took so long to review ^^
The title really caught my attention so I’ll give you 5
Description/Summary/Foreword: (4/5)
The description was okay but the letters were too BIG. I think you should minimize it a little. But I like the way you describe the characters.
Story Plot/Originality: (10/10)
I may have read a lot of stories with a cold person but this one is different. So I’ll give you a PERFECT 10!
Flow: (10/10)
The flow of the story was GOOD
Grammar/Spelling: (8/10)
There was one misspelled word and it was from the description. The word was “noscence” I think you should change it to “nonsense”. There were wrong grammars too. The 1st one and 2nd one were from the description and the 3rd one was from the chapter 15
1.Instead of: Theres nothing that your dad can’t do.
Consider: There’s nothing that your dad can’t do.
2.Instead of: You didn’t had friends anyway
Consider: You didn’t have friends anyway.
3.Instead of: No! Of course I didn’t did that on purpose.
Consider: No! Of course I didn’t do that on purpose.
Enjoyment: (9/10)
I do enjoy your story, but I think you have to make your chapters long. Because some people like chapters that are long, I know because I’m an author too. So I’ll give you 9! ^_^
Total: (46/50)
Would I recommend it?: Of course, Yes!!!
Sorry if it took so long to review ^^
Review by Happy_Virus_21
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